Monthly Archives: March 2011

Turning good into WOW


Your manuscript is complete, now what?
Send it off to the publisher and/or agent of your dreams, right?
Wrong…

Now that your manuscript is complete, and your story is told you have a lot of work ahead of you. First, you are going to want to polish your script. I wish I had known as much about this when I turned in Crushing Desire and Bound by Freedom, Unbound by Love as I do now. It would have made the final edit process easier and more fruitful.
You can’t finish a manuscript and say it is good enough. Unfortunately, it likely won’t fly in the publishing business. They will tell you, in no kind terms that the manuscript isn’t polished and they can’t accept it. I have discovered in my research about the craft that there are steps that you must take when you revise a manuscript and I will list them for you here.

Steps to a final edit…
I can’t say it enough. Edit your manuscript… Edit, edit, edit.

Step one…
Download a text to speech reader.
These things are amazingly helpful for first as well as final edits. When you are reading your manuscript, things might seem to be going smoothly. You know what you meant to write, and you are reading those words and getting wrapped up in the prose. Even your critique partner might miss a small mistake.

Example-
You meant to write:
They moved from the kitchen, holding hands as they went.
But what you typed was:
They moved form the kitchen, holding hands as they went.

This is a mistake you can easily miss. I know that I have missed it form time to time. JK. A reader -such as Natural Reader, which has a free download of their text to speech software- will catch these if you read along with it. I usually open the text in natural reader and my word processor as well. I can then follow along in the word processor document and make corrections while the reader reads the text.

Step two…
Remove repetitive words and beginnings.
It is important to remove repetitive words and repeated sentence beginnings in the text. Overused words can get annoying and you might not catch them on first reread. Look especially for words like had, was, and that. Make certain that all -ly words, such as lazily, have a purpose. If not, omit them. Pay attention to words you overuse, and try to pare them in step two. Check your manuscript for the words saw and noticed, and see that the are not telling instead of showing.

Example-
Jane moved into the room, and was surprised. She saw John sitting on the couch, his length lazily stretched along the cushions of it. She was sure that he knew that she had no dowry, so why was he here? Was she to believe that he thought that she would not know that it was he that had divested her of it?

This is a bit overdone, but you get the picture. It would be better written this way.

Jane stepped into the room, eyes widening in surprise. John reclined on the couch, stretching his length along its cushions. Her dowry was gone and he knew it, having divested her of it personally. So why should he be here?

Removing the repeated and overused words gives the passage a fresher sound. In fact, you could remove the term ‘in surprise’, and ‘stretching his length along its cushions’ in this passage as well. They really are implied. Surprise is suggested in the widening of her eyes. The word reclined insinuates that he is stretched out on the couch. As a romance novelist, however, I appreciate that some things are left in for the craft’s sake. It is up to you. Remove what you can of the repeated words without destroying your voice.

Step three…
Give the manuscript to one, or more, trusted reader(s)
A critique partner, or heck, even two or three of them can be invaluable. Give the script out to beta readers. People who will read your scripts and tell you (honestly!!!) what they think. They might give an opinion on the whole book or on something specific you ask for an opinion on, but they can be helpful in catching mistakes. Your readers can tell you if some question isn’t answered or if there is a major flaw. Some critique partners will go through chapter by chapter with you and give you a detailed critique.

Example-
I have critique partners who is critiquing my current WIP chapter by chapter. I also have two readers that read my WIP and tell me what they think on the whole.

Step four… Final read-through and polish.

Once you have all the feedback and have removed or reworded what must be fixed, it is time for the final polish. This is the spit polish, so to speak. You really want to do your best for this part of the final edit. I often use Natural Reader for this part as well. I want to hear how the final product is sounding. I keep listening until I can get all the way through without revision. Then my manuscript is ready.

Step five…
There is no step five… Yay… If you follow the previous steps, and polish your heart out, you will finally be ready to seek your agent or publisher. You will also have a far better chance that the search will be successful.


April Dawn
-Author of Crushing Desire and Bound by Love available now through Breathless Press, All Romance, and Kindle.

How’s things?


Well, time for another goal check. What have I done so far? Let’s see…

Romantic Suspense WIP- 55k words so far. 30k to go. This new romantic suspense has been fun and interesting. I love Kylee and Hunter, especially their banter.

Short trilogy – in the hands of my editor. Should hear back soon.

Paranormal Romantic Suspense – Completed editing.

The Piratess – Sadly, agents rejected full, but editing based on helpful comments, then will submit to publisher.

Historical Romance series – edited first chapters.

2 ideas fleshed out

Baskets and signing material- ready for RT Con and Expo.

Weight loss – still at 5lbs. Got to get back into the diet. It’s hard with lots of Starbucks afternoons to work on ms without cartoons in the background. lol


The new focus is getting my WIP finished before RT Con (or as close as possible.) So I will be working on that for the next two weeks in every little one free moment. Also, I’m going to try to get back onto the diet and drink only skinny drinks at Starbucks.
Wish me luck. :-D
Oh, and leave a comment. Tell me what your goals are, and how you are doing on them. I’d love to hear about it. Plus, they say that if you state your goals to another person, they are harder to ignore, so give it a try.

April Dawn
-Author of Crushing Desire and Bound by Love available now through Breathless Press, All Romance, and Kindle.

Come Chat – March 25th for RT


Coffee Time Romance is setting up a forum event on March 25th for the RT California authors of mixed genres. Come join me and Ava while we chat away. Find out what’s coming up and where to look for us in RT. Ask whatever questions you’d like.
(You can also ask questions on vyou and I’ll record an answer video)
April Dawn
-Author of Crushing Desire and Bound by Love available now through Breathless Press, All Romance, and Kindle.

Ava Delany
-Fiery and sensual novels by Ava Delany.
The Homecoming series – The Soldier’s return, The Librarian’s Love, and The Wedding night.
The Fetish Club series – Captivated, Dominated, and Fallen
Available through Amazon, AllRomanceEbooks, BP, and more.

It’s not easy: The trials of a write-at-home mother.


How many of you have experienced this?

Everyone’s fed. Diapers are changed. Finally some quiet play time. You sneak over to the laptop and open it for some innocent note-jotting because your inspired. Next thing you know, you’re deep in your scene. The heroine is struggling. The villain has her. She claws the carpet, kicking back at him in an attempt to escape. You’re newborn squeals in glee. You laugh at the sweet sound, but you can’t leave your heroine stranded in the clutches of the villain, so you go back to the scene. The villain slams a fist into her temple, and her world explodes in white lights. Your two-year-old grabs your finger off the keyboard and uses it to push a toy down into a toy milk jug. Your heroine scrambles forward, grasping at a dresser to keep from being pulled beneath the villain. You deftly avoid your son’s clutching fingers while continuing to type at ever faster speeds in the hopes you might be able to finish the scene before being forced to stop. Then your daughter starts to cry, and sadly, your heroine is on her own again…at least until you put the kids to bed.

This was my fun experience today.

The moral -
It’s not easy to write a really tense scene with an infant squealing with baby joy at one of her toys and a two-year-old insisting on using your finger to push down every toy cookie into his mooing milk jug. Such is the trial of the write-at-home mother.

Check me out on Vyou. Come ask a question.


Come check out my vyou profile and get in on this fun new Q&A session.

Three full requests and goal updates


I just received request #3, and I’m very excited. I hope to hear from Jenny Bent soon. Still crossing fingers, toes, etc for her.
I’ve lost 5lbs, not what I’d hoped, but what can you do when faced with ice cream birthday cake? Still, that’s some baby weight off, even in the midst of the craziness.
Finished edits on my para rom suspense. Almost finished with three shorts, and 30k into my rom suspense for RT Convention.
Got all the stuff for the RT Con signing, and am getting the baskets done soon.
All in all, I’m on track. If I keep going like this I may be able to get out one of the blogs I’ve been wanting to write lately. A real blog.
BTW- look for me on Vyou. I’m setting up an account, and you’ll be able to ask me questions there.
April Dawn
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Author of Crushing Desire and Bound by Love available now through Breathless Press, All Romance, and Kindle.