Monthly Archives: July 2012

A Rose by ANY Other Name


Trademarks and Made-up Names
By Kay Springsteen

If you’re writing fiction for a Big 6 publisher, or screen plays for hit TV shows or mega movies, you likely don’t have to worry about mentioning trademarked items or copyrighted names in your work. After all, such companies would have resources to gain rights needed to make the references. But if you’re still a relatively little fish in a sea of other little fishes in the writing world, the mere mention of copyrighted names (Luke Skywalker, Zorro, Superman, Batman, etc.), or even the names of real people (Martha Stewart, Bruce Willis, Sharon Osborne) in a book can bring about nightmares. Most small publishers also request the use of generic equivalents or made-up names for brand-name (trademarked) products (Hershey’s, Keebler, Minute Maid, Coke, Purina, etc.). In some cases this is not possible. Perhaps there is no simple generic replacement or the description is complex (take Mylar balloon for instance; it’s not quite the same thing… getting a bouquet of Mylar and latex balloons versus a bouquet of metallic-looking plastic and latex balloons). In these cases, some publishers will allow use of trademarks if the reference does not paint the product in a negative light. That is, if your serial killer likes to stop at Starbucks for an Iced Caramel Macchiato before every murder, using the branded name in your scenario, you could be construed as stating the drink is responsible for the murder. It’s a stretch but that’s where it gets tricky. Because these days, people stretch. And if you are one of those aforementioned little fish, you will want to take steps so people can’t possibly stretch the connections in a way your writing will come back and bite you. This could involve you, the author, or your agent, acquiring rights from the appropriate person for the appropriate use before you submit (after you submit, it’s often too late unless you want to put your release date on hold while you procure these rights).

Some authors feel—and rightly so—that using brand names in their work helps readers identify with the story better. It lends an air of the familiar, the recognizable, and sometimes these things help readers identify with a character. Unfortunately, that benefit is currently overshadowed when you are published through a smaller press, by the fact that these smaller presses cannot afford the actual cost of defending usage or even the negative publicity surrounding a lawsuit. And there is no way to determine, without having secured the rights to use product names, which companies will sue or why.

The thing is, when you want a fashion doll, for instance (thank you to Iris Blobel for the inspiration here), and you cannot use “Barbie,” well, using “fashion doll” also becomes old and tired in the manuscript, and, dare I say a little impersonal and sterile? So over in the Astraea Press Authors’ group, where we tend to really let go and have fun with such things, we got everything from several suggestions of alternate names, to more specialized names such as Catalina Cathy or Santa Monica Monique (the equivalent of Malibu Barbie–thanks, Jeanne Theunissen) to suggestions for descriptions to take the place of the name. “Doll,” with the qualifier of “overblown bosom, totally unrealistic… etc.” (thank you, Meg Mims) to simply describing it as “statuesque plastic fashion doll” (Jeff Salter’s suggestion). Besides the impersonal, distancing factor when using only description, the phrasing itself can become boring, not to mention quite cumbersome. And if that doll happens to be a major prop in the story—that is, the favorite companion of a child who plays a large role in the story—naming it “statuesque plastic fashion doll,” becomes far too cumbersome.

This is not only true with fashion dolls, but anything. If your cat has a favorite brand of cat food, and you mention feeding him more than a couple of times in the story, “Tippy’s favorite cat food,” in any incarnation, is just too much. And while it’s true you may be able to describe the blue bag with the red and white checkered box on the front as the cat’s favorite, and then forever after simply describe the character as feeding the cat his favorite food, and sometimes just feeding the cat. With other things, though, such as the aforementioned fashion doll, when it’s a critical part of characterization and shows up on every page or every time the character puts in an appearance, even describing it in great detail, and then using doll or fashion doll throughout the rest of the text is distracting because of the repetition.

One solution? Make the doll its own character. No, not one that walks and talks, but a child’s best friend. And of course the doll will have a name. So make one up. Follow the trend closely enough to acquire the same rhythm (Malibu Barbie becomes Santa Monica Monique) and describe the doll once or twice in different ways. For example, from the mother’s PoV:

“Mother!” wailed Tiffany. “I can’t find Santa Monica Monique!”

Jeanne rolled her eyes. Her daughter was always misplacing the fashion doll and expecting others to find it for her.”

Later, in perhaps the PoV of the mother’s love interest (aka the hero), the description can be furthered, since the mother wouldn’t likely think beyond what type of doll her daughter has lost, but the hero might notice things about it the mom takes for granted:

The dark-hair child kept her eyes focused squarely on the statuesque plastic fashion doll Grasping the red-headed doll around its unrealistically thin waist, Tiffany hopped the figure from room to room in the pink plastic doll house. Good thing the doll was made of hard plastic or its overblown bosom might have given it a concussion the way the kid bounced her around.

“Tiffany, don’t forget to put Monique on the shelf when you go to bed tonight so the dog doesn’t get her again,” said Jeanne as she flounced into the room, her perky walk making her look a little too much like bouncing “Monica” in Trent’s estimation.

The differences in perspective give all the description necessary to tell the reader that this is a mock-Barbie and naming the doll lends credibility by removing the sense of stability. You can do this with any branded item in a story. Need a big box store? Instead of Walmart of K-Mart, try Star Mart. Need a grocery market? Piggly Wiggly can magically become Fred’s Fresh Foods. You don’t have to go crazy, but have a little fun with it. It’s your story, and you’re a creative person…so show off your creativity. Don’t stress because your publisher prefers generic names or made-up names, go ahead and make them up! By making them up instead of going completely generic, you will add dimension to your stories by staving off the sterility of the nonspecific name.

Try it! Pick a brand name and change it to something else. Let me know what you come up with.

5 Great Lines – J.R. Ward’s, Lover Awakened


5 Great Lines from J.R. Ward’s, Lover Awakened

1

“I was dead until you found me, though I breathed. I was sightless, though I could see. And then you came…and I was awakened.”

2

“He knew he was being overbearing as hell, but he couldn’t help it. He was a bonded male. With his pregnant female. There were few things on the planet more aggressive or dangerous. And those bastards were called hurricanes and tornadoes.”

3

“Besides, you think I’m not used to hurting? For me, it’s home sweet home, my brother.”

4

Phury glanced at John and thought that sometimes it took only a hairbreadth between cars to avoid a mortal accident. Sometimes your whole life could hinge on a fraction of an inch. Or the beat of a nanosecond. Or the knock on a door. Kind of made a male believe in the divine.

5

Man, it was a good thing he fought like a nasty bastard or he might have been taken for a nancy.


Ava Delany
The Fetish Club Series, The Homecoming Series, and The Beginnings Series.- on Kindle, Allromanceebooks, and many other places where ebooks are sold.
Look for my newest release- Dark Daze – Coming in June 2012.

Guest Post – Karen Frisch – THE BIRTH OF IDEAS


Please welcome our monthly poster, Karen Frisch, author of What’s in a Name back to Let’s Talk Romance.

THE BIRTH OF IDEAS
By Karen Frisch

Desperately seeking ideas? Take heart, you’re not alone. Sooner or later, every writer fights that battle. The harder we struggle to find plots, characters, or other story essentials, the more elusive they become. Ideas can come from anywhere, though not necessarily in time to help when we need them. What works for one writer doesn’t always work for another.

Many of us start with some coffee, carve out a little time to brainstorm, and hope for the best, when often a jumpstart is easier and more effective. Here are five ways to stir a sluggish or inactive imagination, with ideas to move you forward.

1) Visit places you’ve never been. I’m not suggesting you hop on a plane to Paris. Traveling to a local herb farm with an outdoor café, driving to a town three hours away, or browsing in a bookstore all have one thing in common. They inspire us because they show us something we haven’t seen before. New places can prompt us to imagine what might take place there. They reveal landscape, architecture, or customs that might be unfamiliar to us, and yet they’re close enough to return to if you decide to use them in a story. Example: Sitting at the herb farm’s outdoor café having a cup of tea, you notice a woman enter a nearby greenhouse. Your mind wanders until fifteen minutes later her husband is frantically searching for her. Although you never saw her come out, there’s no sign of her inside. Did you notice anything special about her? Could her disappearance have been deliberate?

2) Delve into the Internet. Investigate subjects you’ve always been curious about, research baby names, or call up plot ideas on a writing website. Explore to your heart’s content since searches by their very nature stir the imagination. Whether aimless or intentional, online searches usually lead from one thing to another, turning up all kinds of topics writers never considered putting into a book—until now. Example: A husband and wife traveling from Oregon to Wyoming spend two nights on the road, checking in by cell phone with the wife’s sister in Wyoming before they disappear somewhere in Idaho. How long does the worried sister wait before contacting police?

3) Play the “What if” game. Mystery authors see life through the eyes of their detective while romance writers see relationships and situations, yet they all start with what if. Need to see it in black and white? Make a list of “types” of men and women. For men, consider traditional types: athletic, medical, businesslike, saving-the-planet types, or down-on-the-farm types. For women, think of various archetypes: professional woman, always a bridesmaid, urban schoolteacher, craftswoman, or nurse. Next, give someone a situation. Example: The high-stakes deal maker from Los Angeles is forced to relocate to rural Vermont for an extended period when his younger sister faces long-term hospitalization and needs someone to care for her small farm filled with rescued animals.

4) Consider a difficult situation you or a friend has endured, and look at how he or she worked through it. Real life is a great teacher when it comes to creating convincing scenes that contain depth. When you create realistic problems for your characters, however, the problem of getting them out of the situation becomes your problem. Why struggle when you can meet a friend or writing partner for coffee and inspiration? Someone else’s problem is always easier to fix than your own, and the handling of it is often inspiring. Example: Suzanne’s husband announces he has tired of their marriage just as she discovers she’s pregnant. Does she tell him?

5) Look to news headlines for intriguing scenarios. Watch for unsolved mysteries in the news. Whether local or national, there’s always a story that hits a nerve with each of us. Pick a fictional first name for your female character, put her into a situation, and explore how she might handle it. Example: Gina walks up her porch steps after dark and sees the front door open and a light coming from a back room. What does she do next?

To give yourself an incentive, re-read something you’ve written that you were especially pleased with, published or not. It will boost your confidence and make writing’s rough road a little easier.

(Karen Frisch is the author of three published novels: the historical romance What’s in a Name from Avalon, the Regency Lady Delphinia’s Deception from ImaJinn Books, and the Victorian mystery Murder Most Civil from Mainly Murder Press. All are available on Amazon, as are her two genealogy books, Unlocking the Secrets in Old Photographs and Creating Junior Genealogists.)

5 Great Lines from Sunny Days for Sam by Jennifer Shirk


5 Great Lines from Sunny Days for Sam by Jennifer Shirk

1

Sunny bit her lip, tucking little blond pieces of hair that had fallen out of her ponytail behind her ears. “Well, under normal circumstances I would never even think about bringing my dog to any job I had— assuming I still have a job after— this but I didn’t want to be late, so I had to make a split-second decision. Oats was acting funny this morning, and I did want to take a chance that she could be sick.”

              He threw his hands up in air. “Oh, great, so you brought your sick dog here?

2

Special?

Sam cocked his head as he studied Sunny. Almost all of her hair had escaped out of her ponytail now. She wore a baggy pink sweatshirt and had on the kind of drawstring plaid pants that would have set Bozo the clown’s heart pitter-pattering with envy. Her yellow tennis shoes were covered with dog hair.

Yeah, special was one word for her.

3

“The nanny?” Mark’s eyebrows shot up, and his surprised gaze slid to Sam. “No, as a matter fact I didn’t know that. Sammy boy here never mentioned he hired such a… fun-looking nanny.”

 Sam tried to say something but choked on his saliva.

4

“Am I dead?” Sunny suddenly croaked. 

He hung his head and let out a nervous chuckle. Thank God she was all right. Just… thank God. He quickly composed himself, then pinned her with a hard stare. “No, you’re not dead, but you’re going to wish you were when I get through with you.”

5

A little thrill crept up her spine. Her tongue felt too sick and clumsy to speak, and she was so paralyzed by having Sam’s lips so close to hers, she couldn’t even nod. If it wasn’t for her heart beating like a heavy metal drum, Sam probably would’ve had to check her for a pulse. Automatically, her gaze turned his mouth, and that’s when she knew he was going to kiss her.


Ava Delany
The Fetish Club Series, The Homecoming Series, and The Beginnings Series.- on Kindle, Allromanceebooks, and many other places where ebooks are sold.
Look for my newest release- Dark Daze – Coming in June 2012.

5 Great Lines from Charmed By Knight by Marie Higgins


5 Great Lines from Charmed By Knight by Marie Higgins

1

“If it comforts your mind any, when I undressed you, I was a complete gentleman and didn’t look.”

2

While dealing the cards, every move he made bespoke confidence, like an artist smoothing his brush-strokes on a canvas.

3

“You know, my sweet lady, you shouldn’t look at a man with wide, curious eyes, and a gaze that devours him the way yours was doing because it might give him improper thoughts.”

4

Megan would leave, and it seemed as if the gates to paradise slammed closed in Edmund’s face.

5

“Megan, are you going to follow your parents’ plan and marry a nobleman with title and then live the rest of your life in misery or are you going to marry a man for love and live happily ever after?”


Ava Delany
The Fetish Club Series, The Homecoming Series, and The Beginnings Series.- on Kindle, Allromanceebooks, and many other places where ebooks are sold.
Look for my newest release- Dark Daze – Coming in June 2012.

The Winner of the Dark Daze Release Day Giveaway is…


Ginny!

Congratulations on winning a copy of Dark Daze, by Ava Delany. I’ve sent you an email, please respond to confirm your address so I can pass along the gift card for the book.

Keep an eye out or Ava’s blog tour, July 15th-19th to win more copies